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I was paddling my boat in the ocean. I was 5km out from shore. Suddenly I felt very tired and fell asleep. 2 hours later I had woken up. Then I stood up on my boat. In the bottom of my feet I could not feel any rocking. I thought I must be in very calm waters. looking around, I had arrived at an island, “but where on earth am I?” “Come in, come in do you copy?” I said to my walky talky. There was no reply.

I got out my phone to see if there was any reception  “but there wasn't any”.

So I decided to set up camp. I found some dry moss,some branches, leaves and a stick. It took a long time to build but at least I have shelter. I grab some of the moss that I collected earlier. I grabbed the stick and went right and left again until the moss started burning. 5 minutes later of hard work it had lit.

I thought to myself I  better quickly get some dinner. I found a stream. I looked really hard to see if I could find any fish. “There!”  I quickly grabbed it. It started jumping everywhere. I lost it. I struggled to hold it because it was so slippery from coming out of the water. I had caught a salmon.

I had finally got back to my shelter. Looking out to the mountains the sun started to go down below the horizon. I said  to myself it is time for bed.

The following morning I had got up. All of a sudden I hear someone calling “are you there, are you there?” “Copy that”. The man on the other side of the line replied “who are you”? I replied saying my name is Jared. They said back “my name is Mark”. “Are you lost”? I said “I am well intruely lost”. “I will help you ok” “ok”  “Can you give me a description of the island, so we can send a rescue helicopter to come and rescue you” “Sure I can”

“ok” “ it is very bushy, it has tall pine trees”. “Hang on I need to get a piece paper and a pen”. “Is that all you can give me”. “Yes” “ok”.

1 hour later they had found me and some man came down on a winch and a harness. He gave me a harness and were winched up to the helicopter. We flew back to the station. I was very happy to be rescued.             

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A Blood Story

It was just before dinner. We were having pizza. My sister was teasing me with a slice that she had taken off my plate. I felt very angry at her when she took the slice.

I chased her all around the backyard. 5 minutes later she had finally given up. Then she said “here you go.” I said next time I will get your piece of pizza. I went to grab it but she started running again with it. That’s when I fell over and grassed my head.

Then it started bleeding. I walked inside to mum, she helped me clean it up with disinfectant. I put it on cotton buds. It took 5 minutes to clean it all up. Finally it stopped bleeding. It was sore for a while. It felt like I had bumped my head on something. It gave me a headache all night.

In the morning it wasn't as sore. The next day I went to school. Everyone in my class asked me  “what did you do to your head?” I said it was a long story. So I told all of them. Then I had to write about something that I did in the weekend. I thought to myself I know what I am going to write about. So I wrote about my accident all with thanks to the help of my sister.   

The Best Part Of Me

I love my tongue. It is a human tool that everyone can use. You have little things on it called taste buds. That is how you can taste food.

It helps you move your food around in your mouth when you are chewing food. If you didn't have a tongue people wouldn't be able to understand you.

My tongue helps me pronounce my words properly so people can understand me when I talk. When I am cooking a meal for my family, my tongue helps me to get the perfect flavour so my family will enjoy my cooking. When my sister is being cheeky I can poke my tongue at her.

I like eating and cooking and my tongue helps me do both of those things.       

Production Diary Part 4

Today we were once again practicing for our production. The whole of Nga Rakau Nui was in the hall. I was sitting on a bench seat that was close to the stage. Then the first legend started. It was room 19 and 12. Their legend is called Rangi and Papa. Then 45 minutes later I had to go to the optometrist for an eye check on the rehearsal day , to see if my eyes had changed since last time.

I did the first test was a machine that moves like on top of a gearbox, that scaned your eyes.There was two machines that were welded to the table.  The pictures were excellent said the lady that operated the machine. You had to look at this picture of a red house.  Then on to the second machine on the table . On the other one you had to look, into it and it would show this red dot that would flash on and off. It would eventually take a picture of your eyes. Then I  had to wait for a little bit for the optometrist to finish, with the client that was in there. Then we walked into this room that had a mirror by the door and a tv on the other side of the room. Standing by the wall was a chair and a machine which I did not know what it did. He said that my eyes hadn't changed.

Waking Up In The Morning

Oh no it’s 7.00 looking at my alarm clock. Time to get up I thought to myself. Oh It’s Monday morning. Getting out of bed I feel tired and don’t want to go to school. I have to go to school to learn. Then I doze off for about 5 minutes. Oh, school I better get ready. My sister was having  breakfast. She was eating marmite on toast. I had some toast with butter. Then I quickly walked back down the hallway to my room and got dressed. I squeezed some toothpaste onto my toothbrush. I brush up and down on my teeth. Then brush my hair.

Then I walk to the dining room to unplug my computer. I put it in the case and zip it up. Secondly I put it in my bag gently. I put my lunch into my lunch box. Click,click goes the clips to lock my lunch box. Next I fill my drink bottle with cold water out of the tap. Next I put it in my bag. Then I grab my glasses from my bedroom and put them in my bag. Finally I grab my book packet and put that in my bag. Mum asked, “are you ready to go” ? We replied yes.

Mum unlocked the shed. Then started up the car and reversed out of the shed and on to the driveway. Our Car is a Honda Accord. Then I put my bag in the car. My sister does the same thing. Finally mum locked the shed door, locked the front door. Then I say good bye to Sam and Ninja. We got in the car and closed the doors. We all put our seatbelts on. Then mum started up the car. Mum let the car warm up. Then we drove off to school.        

The Elephants Child Retell

There once was a elephant who asked really curious questions. In his family there was his mum, Aunt Hippopotamus,Uncle Baboon, Aunty Kuko bird and his Uncle Giraffe. The question he asked his mum was what do crocodiles have for dinner?. Then his mum would spank him. Then asked his Aunt Hippopotamus and he got another spank from his aunt. He asked Uncle Baboon,aunty bird and uncle giraffe and they all spanked him as well. They spanked him till he was red all over. After that they all said if you want to find out what they have for dinner. He had only a little nose. Yes I do. Well go to the river than and you will see replied his mum. So the elephants child set of on a journey to the river.

On the way to the river he walked past lots of trees. He took some food with him. All he took with him was 100 rockmelon, 10 coconuts and 40 bananas with him. He travelled a long way through the middle of Africa to get to the river.

On the way he meet a rock python snake was wrapped around a rock in the mud by the river. The elephant's child asked the rock python and said what do crocodiles have for dinner. The  elephants child spoke to the snake and said please don't spank me please I have been spanked by all of my family. Suddenly the rock python snake spanked the elephants child. The python said go over to the river and see for yourself.

So the elephants child did and he meet a crocodile. Then asked the crocodile what do you have for dinner asked the elephants child. The crocodile replied and said come a little closer. So the elephant's child did. The crocodile said come even closer and the elephant did come closer. Then again the elephant moved even closer. Once more again the elephant moved closer. The next second the crocodile snap his jaws wide open and got hold of the elephants childs little nose. Then both the crocodile and the elephant pulled. The elephants childs nose started to stretch more and more.Suddenly the rock python said to the elephant I will come and help you pull. They were both pulling so hard that the elephant nose was so sore it was red. Finally the crocodile let go of the elephants paw nose. He managed to get his nose out with the help of the rock python. Then thanked the python for helping him.

The python started to talk to the elephant and said look you have got advantages. The python said advantage number 1 you are spraying water on your back to keep you nice and cool. He could now also put on a mud cap on. Advantage number 2 you can grab leaves to eat of the trees. You couldn't do that before could you. No replied the elephants child. Once more the python said advantage number 3 now you can spank. Oh I can go and spank my family now because they spanked me hard. Now I will spank my family even harder than they did to me. So the elephants child set off back to where he came from. With him he took a lot of  leaves rock melon and some sugar cane He took lots of leaves and rockmelon, sugar cane with him on his journey back to where he had come from. After a long time crossing the middle of Africa he finally arrived home. He started to spank his aunt hippopotamus,uncle graffe, his mum and his uncle baboon. He didn't let anyone touch his aunty kuko bird. Then after that all his family wanted a nose like that. They all asked the elephant where did you get that nose from. The elephant replied saying go see the crocodile at the river where I walked to on the other side of Africa. So some of his family set off and went to the same river as he did. So now all the elephants you see now have a long nose which is called a trunk.

Robot And Bear

What is happening in this picture?

You choose what to write based on the picture:

A story? A news report? A moment in time? A recount from the bear’s / robot’s / Lego man’s perspective? ...

:

WALT organise our ideas into an effective structure

Success Criteria

• Beginning, middle and end (like a hamburger)
• Paragraph groups of ideas
• Some complex sentences

This is Jared reporting from studio.This is the big story of today. I have received this picture of this robot and a teddy bear. The bear is standing on a jettie, off this lovely beach. Have a look at this picture.  

This is the description of the robot and his teddy. The robot has some buttons on the front of him.  It has blue eyes, with white dots in the middle of the eyes, red hands, white over most of the body. The windup is grey. His teddy bear has a white cream color on his chest and stomach. He has brown feet and a stripe of white cream again. The rest of him is brown. Teddy has a black nose. The teddy also has black eyes with a white dot in the middle.

  The robot seems to be holding a teddy bear. If you look to the bottom of the picture you will see a reflection in the water. The reflection that you can see is a lego man in a suit with black stripes and four buttons. The lego man also has yellow hands. The lego man is smiling with his eyebrows up above his eyes. I think that the lego man is exactly the same as the robot with his teddy bear.. By the looks the man is holding a walking stick in his right hand. The lego man also has some spiky hair. The colour is brown. He is holding the same teddy bear as the wind up robot is.

In the water the lego man is standing on the same jettie as the wind up robot. The reflection looks like the sky is a fine day with no clouds. If you turn it around the other way it looks like the robot and his ted are up the right way.  

He could be dangerous so dont approach him. Call the police if you see him. He could just be on holiday.  He might just be having a day out at the beach. I don't know for sure. This is the end of the major story of the day. Now for the weather forecast. Good night.       

Beans

I am baked beans getting toasted on the fire.

I am jumping beans jumping on a trampoline.

I am nacho beans with my friends mince,salsa,sour cream,cheese and corn chips.

I am monster beans terrorizing a village.

I am sliding beans sliding on soap.

I am trucker bean driving a Mack.

I am grand prix beans racing a formula 1 car.

I am typing beans typing on a computer.

I am wild beans going wild.

I am sniper beans sniping off a roof.

I am police beans giving people tickets.

I am stunt beans jumping cars.

Flaxrock

It was morning tea time. We were playing handball just outside the classroom. I was playing with Ben ,Liam and some other people in the class. Then Mr M told us to come inside and sit down on the mat. Most of the parents were in the classroom. Then Mr M told us our traveling groups and who we were going with. I was going with Camerons mum. There were three other people that was coming with me Cameron and his mum. They were Brayden and Ezra. We were going in Camerons mums car. It is a blue Toyota Camry.

Flaxrock is in Flaxmere behind the Flaxmere library and pools. It is in the Flaxmere community centre. We drove to the end of Howard Street and then turned left on to Windsor Ave. Ave stands for avenue. Then turned right to go down st Aubyn Street. Then we turned left on to Sylvan Street. Then to the round about on Heretaunga street. Straight a little bit then down Riverslea Road. Murdoch Road then to the end of Murdoch road. Then on to Southampton Street. Then we drove down Wall road and then on to Maraekakaho Road. Then turned right on to York Road and some other streets that I didn't know the names. Then the last street was Swansea Street. Then up the driveway and then to the park in the carpark at the back. Then we walk to the entrance. We were waiting for Mr M to come. Then he got to flaxrock and he parked his Subaru Legacy.

Then we walk to the entrance. It was the first time that I have ever been to Flaxrock. Then Mr M went and talked to them to see if we had come to the right place. And it turns out that we had come to the right place. Then we walked inside and wiped our feet on the mat. Then walked through two hallways. We walked past the gym. There was some people in the gym were lifting some heavy weights that looked really heavy. Some others were on the treadmill.

Then we finally walked into Flaxrock. Then I looked up and I was thinking in my head and I was saying to myself wow this is not what I imaged it would be in my head. Then the whole of room 6 sat down on some wooden seats that I think they were welded to the ground by the looks of things. They looked like grandstands at the speedway ,but they weren't though. Then we got told to be quiet by Mr M. Then Aaron was talking to us about the rules and what to do. Aaron is the instructor that was there that day. He said if you touch the top of the wall you have to hit the metal pipe so that everyone could hear that you had reached the top on the climbing wall. I didn't do it. Instead I took photos of all the other people rock climbing. It was good fun taking photos of everyone else. My favourite thing was taking photos of all the people rock climbing. The challenging part was taking photos when they were at the top of the wall. The proud part was taking photos that were of people that were right at the top or near the top of the wall.                              

Broken

This device (phone) is broken.

Write about a time you broke something!

OR

Imagine that you broke your device or phone and describe how it happened.

WALT use different sentence starters and lengths.

To do this, I will try to:

• Start sentences with different words
• Start sentences with capital letters
• Use other punctuation (check the ladder)
• Show my feelings
• Use my senses to describe
  
  
• Include strong verbs

BROKEN

I got out a glass cup out from the cupboard. Then I walked outside with it to the back step. It was a nice sunny day that day. It had was filled with water all the way to the top of the cup. Tea water was nice and cold because it was out of the fridge. The color of the glass cup was red with yellow dots on it. The top and bottom were just clear glass. They were tall cups. The cups were from Mcdonalds. Then the next minute it fell down of the step and flowed down the steps like it was a river and then stopped finally at the bottom of the steps which was concrete and there was some grass as well.  I thought to myself that i'm going to be in big trouble because I broke the cup. The water came washing down the steps and I thought to myself I'm going to be in deep trouble now. Then I tried to clean it up but I got caught by my mum. She said that it was das glass cup with red and yellow with yellow dots. I'm really going to be in deep trouble now because it was my dads cup. Mum and dad have one each. Mums cup was still in good nick. Then she growled at me, and I said it was just an accident so then she replied ok then it was an accident then. I was only at kindergarten when this happened and this was after kindergarten. I thought I would get a smack from my dad when he got home from work, but in the end I just got a big growling from my dad. He was really angry because of that. IIt made he even angrier than he was because he had a bad day at work where he was working at. After it was tea time. I ate my tea at the table with mum, my dad and my baby sister. After tea I watched a bit of tv and then I walked and got into my bed and went to sleep. Then I woke up in the morning and it was back to normal again. My dad had gone to work and it was just me and my mum home until I go to kindergarten. Then it was   time to walk to kindergarten which was just down the road from my house. It was down the road around a corner and cross a road and then I would be at kindergarten.

A Fun Moment

Writing Purpose: To Entertain

Type of writing: moment in time

WALT use our senses to describe

• (see, hear, smell, feel, taste)
• different sentence starters / some short sentences
• action verbs (crash / crashing, scratches / scratch / scratching, smack / smacks / smacking bounce / bouncing, sprint / sprints / sprinting, dodge / dodges / dodging)
• present tense (I am, he is, we are)

I invited 11 people to my 11th birthday. I am amazed what food I have on the table waiting for me. It was all the food that I wanted to have. I wanted to eat all the food on the table by myself. Then the cake came out. It was on the bench by the sink. It was a jaffa cake with delicious icing on it. It also had little bits of chocolate lines that were all over the cake.  Then I added more detail to it by putting on some snakes. The snakes were all different colors like red, yellow, purple. I put the snakes around the outside of the candles and to make it even I had to weave it between to candles to touch the other one. They were all touching each other around the cake.  I look at it ,looks alot better then it was before. Then I double check to see if it has got all eleven candles on it and it does indeed have eleven candles on it.

Then everyone started to sing happy birthday to me. After that I huff and then I puff and I blowed the candles out except for one. Then I blowed out the last candle and it finally went out. Then I cut the first  my way down the ages slice of jaffa cake. Then I started to give out the cake. I start with the oldest people first and work my way down the ages. The oldest I know is Noel. Then I gave everyone there slice of cake. Then I got my piece of cake it was delicious. I would want to have that cake again and again. I got the biggest slice of jaffa cake out of everyone else. Everyone enjoyed the yummy party food and had a good time at my birthday party and all the rest of it. It was a great time.

Coke Bottle

Writing Purpose: To Entertain

WALT use our senses to describe

• (see, hear, smell, feel, taste)
• different sentence starters
• some short sentences

Class Word Bank:

spray, like a mustache, pop! x-factor, explosion, imagine if you had to clean that up, enjoyment, fireworks, nostrils, Coke, brown sticky foam, whiskers, friends, blow, soaked, boom! Coke bomb, power, fizz, amaze, cool-down, pumped up, fizzy, bottle rocket, ouch!

I got my coke bottle out of the fridge. I started to open my bottle of coke. Then went to go get something to eat. Then I turned the it and I pulled it out and the next second know I get my Coke sprayed in my face. It shoots out like a rocket but it is so fizzy though. It shot up my nostrils it felt tingly up in my nostrils.  I am amazed that the fizzy has come up like a rocket so fast then I could believe my eyes.It sprayed out into my face and I think I had a coke mustache.

I'm thinking in my head that it would hurt because of how fast it has come up. It shot up like a rocket. I didn't want to open my eyes because it would sting and I would have to go and see the eye doctor to check if the coke hadn't done any damage to my eyes.It spayed out into my face and I think I had a coke mustache. It pumped out like someone was pumping the coke out. The coke is like a bomb that has exploded that had gone boom. I came out like fireworks popping in the sky. The Coke had soaked me. I have sticky foam to clean up on the floor and the bench and my cloths and also my face which was really sticky. I thought to myself should I drink the coke. Then I thought to myself, I might as well drink it because it would be such a big waste of coke. So I skulled  it back really fast. Luckily it wasn't really cold because I wouldn't have been able to scale it back. Luckily it wasn't an bottle rocket upside down because it would of blown up into the air. Because it was glass it would have fallen back down, and brake because it was glass. I enjoyed having the bottle of coke spray out in my face. I was so angry because I had to clean up the big sticky mess that the coke had made on the floor.  

Noel

The oldest person I know is my nanas partner. His name is Noel and he is 69 years old. he still works. His job involves driving diggers and bulldozer digging trenches. He works in Taupo and comes home in the weekend. He wears silver glasses. He has two cars they are both Kias. one is a Kia Sorento and the other is a Kia Cerato. One is a sedan the other is a SUV which stands for sports utility vehicle. His skin is wrinkled. He always wears shorts and t- shirt. In the weekend he goes out to his vegetable garden and picks his crop like cauliflower, broccoli, carrots, lettuce and silver beet. He has also got a compost bin as well. In the weekends he is either watching TV or on his computer. We usually catch up with him in the weekends and have a cuppa and a biscuit with him and nana. He tells us about his week at work. we tell him about our week at school. He also has a interested in photography and takes photos of all sorts of interesting things. He is a friendly kind person. He has hearing aides. His voice his loud. He has a firm handshake and sometimes he gives me a handshake and tries to squeeze my hand off. He always talk about rugby when I go round because he likes rugby.

Paddock 5 Senses

I could taste the fresh air. The taste of the wood was sweet. The wood felt like sandpaper when I licked it. I could touch the grass it felt moist and soft . I could smell the moisture lurking in the air. I could taste the fence it tasted like cold metallic that had a few drips of water. The grass was frosty because Jack Frost had been. I could see trees, some were green and some were yellow and orange. I also saw some palms the were a nice bright green. Behind the trees I could see Te Mata Peak and all the surrounding hills. Some had little patches of green  grass and some had big patches. Some even have gigantic patches of pine trees. The color of the trees is a black brownish color. I could see all sorts of cars they were a Suzuki Swift, Toyota Corolla, Mitsubishi Diamante, Mazda Cx 9, Toyota Caravan, Holden Commodore and a Mitsubishi Evo 10. Evo is short for Evolution.    

I could see the giant laying dead and still as a rock on the top of Te Mata Peak. I could hear the sound of a plane. It was noisy and sounded like it was about to take off from the airport. I could see a bird it was squawking as it was flying. In the distance back towards school I could see a corn field that was not quite ripe. In the paddock I could see horses running around. They were a golden brown with a black golden brown wiry tail and mane. Some had white coats on that covered there back and there neck. The houses on the other side of Howard Street from the paddocks were made out of white whether boards of black and red bricks. On the other side of the first wire fence is an electric fence which I got a shock from but I didn't touch it though. I could tell that it was an electric fence because it had a yellow plastic handle thing on it. Under the line of electric wire by the wood post was two black rubbish bags. I could tell that they were full of rubbish. They were bulging out from the sides front and back.

Fun Swimming Sports

Sitting waiting for my turn to go in the fun relays in the pool. In my team there was William,me, Ollie and some other girl which I didn't know her name. I was in team 3  Pukeko.

While I was waiting I could see the trees that are by the pool they were swaying gently in the breeze. I could see water splashing against the edge of the pool. Behind the seats that the teams and some parents is a fence. The fence is metal  that has little spikes on the top and is the color silver.  I heard people cheering for their team and their house color.  

Later on the it got really sunny and I could feel the sun heating up on my back. It felt nice but then it got a bit too hot so I turned around for a little bit. Also while I was waiting I could smell the chlorine in the pool.

I could hear people cheering for their team and also there house color. While I was going to get in the pool I felt the concrete it was rough. Finally it was my turn to get in the pool it was freezing like ice cubes had been poured into the pool.  

Then the wind came up, I could taste the dust  that the wind had blown up. We I got into the pool I could taste the water and the chlorine in the water which was yuck. Then I had a sore throat and  it didn't help swallowing the water with the chlorine because it made my throat worse. First was flutter boards then noodles. After those activities it was the penny dive which we were diving for plastic coins.Each one that we got would be a point for our house color so if you were in red it would be a point for them. Then we got out of the pool it was team 4’s turn from all the house  colours. I felt a bit nervous and excited when we started. At the end of the day it felt good doing some swimming that day.

A Scene

My scene: I smell the deer blood. It smelled like something that had died and that's how I like it. I was sprinting after my prey at a speed of  50 km an hour.  I have to give up on that deer it was just too fast for me. If I hadn't given up I would have lost all my energy and it would take me a long time to get my energy back. I'm hiding in the long grass I can smell the fresh meat of the deer. I get ready to pounce and I pounce on the deer and only managed to get the deer. It the same one I was chasing earlier. I start eating the meat of the deer it is so delicious it is so juicy and so tender. It is a bit chewy in every bit of the meat. I'm still hungry so i'm hide in the long grass again im there for about 15 minutes then I hear a rustling noise and stick my head out of the grass a little bit and it is another its another deer so I creep up on it and I get it. It tastes exactly like the other deer. The deer feels hairy like a rabbit with a lot of hair on it. The deer’s hair was soft and it was all jagged everywhere on the deer's body.

Top House

On the 21st of February 2014 we did a top house competition which is the best house out of all the house colors. There are Pukeko which is red , Tui which is black , Kea is green, Hoiho is yellow, Takahe is blue. It was just the senior school doing top house.

There were year 4s year 5s and also year 6s doing top house. There were 5 activities that we had to do where we were all standing in hoops and we either had to throw a tennis ball which the The tennis balls were just normal tennis ball, , or throw bean bags that were all different colors    and one of the bean bags was a blue turtle. When the tennis ball or the bean bag got to the end and the person that was at the end had to roll the ball or throw the ball or if it was a bean bag it was the same thing with that. How many balls or bean bags that you got in the hoop is how many points that you got for that activity that was with Ms Roil. she teaches in room 10.Then after you have put the bean bag or tennis ball in the  hoop the person would run to the start of the line and start the activity again and it keeps on going until the whistle blows for each activity

Then after you have put the bean bag or tennis ball in the  hoop the person would run to the start of the line and start the activity again and it keeps on going until the whistle blows for each activity   Then the next activity that we did was with Mr Ford he teaches in room 20. so the activity that we did with Mr Ford was he had hurdles out and bites of carpet on the grass and we had to uses them to get across the grass because the grass was very poisonous and we would die if we touched the grass.

The next activity was with Mr Cottrell who teaches in room 7. The activity that he  throw the jack in the bucket, if that person got the jack in the bucket it would be a point for that person,s team. At all the activities we were facing one of the Hoiho teams. There also was a counter from each team. We got 41 points and that Hoiho team didn't get as many so we won that one activity against Hoiho.

The next activity that we did was with Mr Moriarty. We had to do a three legged race to the cone and then pick up a ball and roll it and if it hit the cricket wicket you got a point for your team like all the other activities that we did.

The next activity was with Mrs Lowe which was the teams was all in a line and we had to touch each others shoulders. There also was a batten that we had to pass down the line. When you have it and you have passed it to the other person beside you run to the front of the line. Then you do it again until the whistle blows and then that's the end of that activity. I felt a bit nervous but then it was alright after that and I got straight into it.