Wednesday, August 20, 2014

The Ghosts of Young Nicks head

The weather at Young Nicks Head was stormy with rain, thunder and lighting. With the window rattling away at the top story of the old house. Then flashes of lightning flashed in the room and lit the corners up of the room. Joe counted the seconds between the lightning and the thunder. The thunder which was shaking up above the house. Then all of a sudden the power went out. Alec spoke  it’s probably a power cut and the lightning had struck the power lines.

Next there was a loud knock on the front door, with a black,shadowy, round object at the door. Joe said to the door loud enough to hear on the other side “hello”. Joe opened the door. There standing in black gumboots, with a rain coat was a stranger. Next Joe's dad walked to the door. The stranger said to Alec since there is a power cut I thought that you might want some candles and some oil lamps. The oil lamps were rusty and old. The candles were used but still had some wax. Joe’s dad said to the stranger “thank you”. The stranger said that these will last you the whole night and maybe tomorrow night if the power is still out. Then Joe’s mum said you must come in for a cup of tea. But he said no thank you but, Joe’s mum insisted to have a cuppa. The stranger had walked away in the distance. All that Joe and his parents, Eddie could see was a dark,black spot in the distance. Then they lit the oil lamps and the candles on a sourcer. Joe and eddie had a candle each. Alec Joe’s dad had a oil lamp and so did Joe’s mum.

1 comment:

  1. I really like your sentences, Jared. They build the suspense and are very well written!

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